Essentially this is a RotG story with a "Benjamin Button" inspired structure. It's much shorter than what I'm used to writing. I have this story penned for 15-20 chapters all between 2,000-4,000 words each. It's not an epic or anything. Just a romantic drama that an enormously irritating plot bunny, an overzealous imagination, and a fantastic film, forced me to write.
Since this is the first chapter, I would really appreciate reviews/ comments that focus on characterization the story's premise. Do you find Gwyn believable, annoying, sympathetic/ not sympathetic; does little Sophie seem in character; how about Jack? Most importantly, did this chapter establish enough to keep you interested and/ or wanting to know more? All advise is good advise, because it's the only way I can grow as a writer.
Chapter II is up! [link]