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Since this is the first chapter, I would really appreciate reviews/ comments that focus on characterization the story's premise. Do you find Gwyn believable, annoying, sympathetic/ not sympathetic; does little Sophie seem in character; how about Jack? Most importantly, did this chapter establish enough to keep you interested and/ or wanting to know more? All advise is good advise, because it's the only way I can grow as a writer.
Chapter II is up! [link]
First thing [and not really about the story] is that I really don't like the format this is uploaded in. It's incredibly hard on my eyes and zooming in means I have to scroll sideways for every single line I read. You can always hit the "add text" button when uploading, although you'll have to add in the bold/italic/underline/etc coding.
There's also a few typos;
"with such a thick blanket of white, that Gwyn Bennett could hardly tell" - just being a bit picky here
"It was a quite ward." - should be 'quiet'
But overall, I think it's interesting. I'm guessing Gwyn is Jack's kid.